Was in the middle of this drawign when I got your critiques... I'll do a third one later on with all of the suggestions incorporated. Rog. More critique off this guy would be helpful too.
We're getting very close to a final look, but nothing but props to ya man. The final recommendations I would make are:
1. Shorten the upper legs. This will emphasize the "stuby" look and make his lower legs and feet look larger. (If you want, you can experiment with making the lower leg visually wider, though it may not be necessary)
2. Raise up the chest piece to about his ribs. It might look girly at first, but I'm worried that we're covering him up TOO much. Or you could open up the chest piece to a vest. Looking at the silhouette, I basically think his stomach area needs to come in a bit. If it's smaller, it will direct the viewer's attention to the parts of him that have more visual weight like his head or his hands. The back part of it is great, but for the front think Aladdin. Play around with that.
3. Make his expression less bad ass. The David we've written is afraid of this journey ahead. Try a nervous expression or pose. You may find that the nose ring and the bones throughout the outfit don't fit that personality, but I do like the piercing idea somewhere.
4. Diversify the color pallet. I would whiten the fur and clearly separate the color of his skin from the color of the cloth. I'd also be interested in seeing the red more saturated.
5. David is going to use a spear and a torch (the knife idea wasn't necessary). The spear might not always be in his hand so it needs someplace to go; like his back?
Things are looking great and we're nearly done with this guy. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
We like the spear from the original drawing. For this entire node, there will be no reason for him to have it out, so we want to put it somewhere on his back. The torch will always be in his left hand.
I like the bottom half of the first concept (with the suggestions I had), but this one's stubby upper legs are better. I like his softer expression here but I think we should keep the poofy back as well, because it adds weight to the top part of his figure.
The first drawing better captured our ideal visual weight of the hands. Because th red strap is within the fur on this drawing, the weight looks like a straight line down to his hands. The first one had a more fluid arc that you should hold on to.
Was in the middle of this drawign when I got your critiques... I'll do a third one later on with all of the suggestions incorporated. Rog. More critique off this guy would be helpful too.
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Great work, once again, Adam!
We're getting very close to a final look, but nothing but props to ya man. The final recommendations I would make are:
1. Shorten the upper legs. This will emphasize the "stuby" look and make his lower legs and feet look larger. (If you want, you can experiment with making the lower leg visually wider, though it may not be necessary)
2. Raise up the chest piece to about his ribs. It might look girly at first, but I'm worried that we're covering him up TOO much. Or you could open up the chest piece to a vest. Looking at the silhouette, I basically think his stomach area needs to come in a bit. If it's smaller, it will direct the viewer's attention to the parts of him that have more visual weight like his head or his hands. The back part of it is great, but for the front think Aladdin. Play around with that.
3. Make his expression less bad ass. The David we've written is afraid of this journey ahead. Try a nervous expression or pose. You may find that the nose ring and the bones throughout the outfit don't fit that personality, but I do like the piercing idea somewhere.
4. Diversify the color pallet. I would whiten the fur and clearly separate the color of his skin from the color of the cloth. I'd also be interested in seeing the red more saturated.
5. David is going to use a spear and a torch (the knife idea wasn't necessary). The spear might not always be in his hand so it needs someplace to go; like his back?
Things are looking great and we're nearly done with this guy. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Hey Adam.
We like the spear from the original drawing. For this entire node, there will be no reason for him to have it out, so we want to put it somewhere on his back. The torch will always be in his left hand.
I like the bottom half of the first concept (with the suggestions I had), but this one's stubby upper legs are better. I like his softer expression here but I think we should keep the poofy back as well, because it adds weight to the top part of his figure.
The first drawing better captured our ideal visual weight of the hands. Because th red strap is within the fur on this drawing, the weight looks like a straight line down to his hands. The first one had a more fluid arc that you should hold on to.
Off to class! I'll try to post more later.
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